Author - C.Schlittenhard | Title - Love Like No Other | R - rated | back to authors |
Date: | 2.11.2005 17:49 |
Name: | tine |
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i agree with kyrie, i think you need more detail and then it would be good |
Date: | 23.10.2005 18:42 |
Name: | Kyrie |
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Put in more detail and this could be really good. |
Date: | 15.10.2005 1:02 |
Name: | Lia Bloom |
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Nice! Pretty good start, need to build up a bit more suspense or maybe even get a better beta reader. I'm sure tons of people would be happy to help, but I wouldn't. Sorry. Well, love that your German! GERMAN'S ARE AWESOME! Anywhoo, I just wanted to review so that maybe you could keep writing and write faster, because I'm extremely interested in this story. Thanks a bunch! |
Date: | 18.2.2005 22:13 |
Name: | polkadots |
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Um good start but I think you need to get some help from a beta reader, I would be happy to help. |
Date: | 16.1.2005 18:24 |
Name: | claire bloom |
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Considering you're German, you're not doing too badly! lol. Well done. Enjoyable first chapter. Good work. |